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Photo posted by Genny K. in the Landscape gallery on 03/24/17 at 3:39 pm EST
Registered on 06/05/06, 132 Posts, 2001 Comments
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Comment posted by Kah Kit Yoong on 03/25/17 at 08:42 am EST
Registered on 09/27/06, 636 Posts, 10682 Comments
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I like the triangles in the composition. The brighter band of snow through the midzone probably is the weak link here which irritates you I'm thinking.
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Comment posted by Ronald Murphy on 03/25/17 at 12:17 pm EST
Registered on 03/13/12, 279 Posts, 975 Comments
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The tones around the water are quite nice. Good as is, but cropped down to just show the water is a nice composition also.
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Comment posted by Lon Overacker on 03/25/17 at 1:35 pm EST
Registered on 11/24/06, 521 Posts, 19147 Comments
Hmmm, yeah, I'm also unsure about the space of white in the middle. Call it "negative" space, or whatever, it's not working well connecting the two other elements of the scene. Interestingly, for some reason, I think a slight crop off the top changes that empty space issue for me a bit. Say, cropping from the top to cut the sky-triangle in half, if that makes sense.
I do like the shapes and forms of the snow surrounding the little stream of water and the tonality of both.
Lon
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To photograph is to hold one's breath, when all faculties converge to capture fleeting reality. It's at that precise moment that mastering an image becomes a great physical and intellectual joy. -Henri Cartier-Bresson
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Comment posted by Preston Birdwell on 03/25/17 at 3:33 pm EST
Registered on 11/01/03, 471 Posts, 5188 Comments
I love the snow and shapes in the foreground, and the tonality there looks very nice. As has been mentioned, the midground flat snow is somewhat overbearing, but if the sky were cropped out, I think that makes the image work. You might also try pulling a little more detail out of the snow.
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Preston Birdwell
Columbia, California, USA
NPN 429 | California Nature Photographers (CANP) Moderator | 'NPN Discussion' Moderator
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Comment posted by Vance Gese on 03/25/17 at 10:49 pm EST
Registered on 11/13/08, 298 Posts, 6629 Comments
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Excellent composition, with the diagonals and triangular forms. The texture in the snow comes through quite well, especially in the foreground, and the snow forms along the creek are wonderful. Wonder if what bugs you is that the large triangular expanse of snow in the middle of your composition has a competitor for the viewer's attention, namely that triangular slice of sky. I would crop out half of the sky, leaving just a small triangle of sky. This would also eliminate that blurry upper right hand corner you mention. Just an idea of course. Love the frosty trees (cottonwoods?) right behind the expanse of snow. Great work with the black and white processing. And nice work with that long lens.
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Vance Gese
Vance Gese Photography
Quilcene, Washington |
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I was merely there, a small, puny, awestruck man,
praising Almighty God, with camera in hand.
Make a few images, well.
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Comment posted by Bill Chambers on 03/26/17 at 07:28 am EST
Registered on 04/10/05, 753 Posts, 21216 Comments
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I will have to disagree with you and the others. The negative space doesn't bother me at all. Overall, I think this is wonderful, especially the diagonal stream and the fact you converted it to B&W. Larger version is a real treat IMHO.
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Bill Chambers
Gulf Breeze, Florida
Please visit Enchanted Light Photography
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Comment posted by Genny K. on 03/26/17 at 3:39 pm EST
Registered on 06/05/06, 132 Posts, 2001 Comments
Thanks for your comments; they really help me figure things out.
The cropping idea definitely seems to help, and Bill, I really appreciate that you like this as is!! In real life, the snow forms along the water were enchanting, but I had to work within some human-made tracks along the right side and in the FG. Sometimes it's hard for me to figure out what to do when I cannot fit everything I want into a composition!!
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Comment posted by Rudy Ruberti on 03/28/17 at 11:24 pm EST
Registered on 10/28/08, 179 Posts, 1875 Comments
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Nice winter scene and the snow in the middle doesn't bother me.
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Rudy Ruberti
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Comment posted by John Williams on 03/29/17 at 11:07 pm EST
Registered on 09/06/07, 221 Posts, 5985 Comments
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The curves of snow are lovely here Genny! I agree that it would be stronger if the stream lead closer to the trees, but that's a nit. This is a very nice image even with that.
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John Williams
www.tranquilviews.com
Battle Ground, WA |
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I often have wandered in deep contemplation, It seems that the mind runs wild when you're all alone. -John Denver
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Comment posted by Doug Koepsel on 03/30/17 at 09:19 am EST
Registered on 04/01/10, 196 Posts, 1592 Comments
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A couple of crop options come to mind; 1) from the top and left to eliminate the gray sky completely. 2) crop to have just the water path through the snow with no trees, ridge or sky. Maybe add just a slight bump in brightness too?
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