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Photo posted by Gary Yeoh in the Flora gallery on 12/11/13 at 1:12 pm EST
Registered on 09/01/09, 588 Posts, 8184 Comments
Post last edited by Gary Yeoh on 12/12/13 at 06:06 am EST
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Comment posted by Giuseppe Guadagno on 12/11/13 at 1:42 pm EST
Registered on 02/03/07, 827 Posts, 5052 Comments
Comment last edited by Giuseppe Guadagno on 12/11/13 at 1:43 pm EST
Gary, first of all: it is a splendid image as it is.
For you question I can only say what I could do if it was mine: I would enhance the most appealing element, the trunk, reducing the negative space on the left and on the top; I love the soft images but here the flowers are so small and crowded that I am not sure that works: the design seems confused. This is the theory, may be in practice does not improve the photo. An attempt.
Take care.
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Gigi
I never stop going out in search of the beautiful picture that - for my great luck - I will never take. |
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Comment posted by Allen Brooks on 12/11/13 at 2:48 pm EST
Registered on 07/27/11, 262 Posts, 2597 Comments
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Very nice composition. I suppose it depends on what you are going for, but for me the flowers blend in too much with the background and I'd like to see a bit more pop to the flowers.
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Comment posted by Ramamohan Pai on 12/11/13 at 4:39 pm EST
Registered on 11/01/03, 550 Posts, 9037 Comments
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Gary - I like the idea behind this. Gigi summarized pretty well - as it is I would love to see the flowers very crisp with the shadows on the branch opened up and sharpened slightly.
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Comment posted by scott lanz on 12/11/13 at 9:33 pm EST
Registered on 11/14/03, 840 Posts, 12902 Comments
I much prefer this version, Gary. I like the crop of the trunk and the rice paper bg. I also like the look of blossoms. My first thought was that you could crop a bit off the left, but I don't feel strongly about this, and I like this one a lot as is. Very artistic. 
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scott lanz
Youngstown, Ohio
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Comment posted by Miro Susta on 12/12/13 at 01:31 am EST
Registered on 08/18/06, 719 Posts, 3736 Comments
Hi Garry, the previous comments are appropriate, actually this a beautiful flower photo artwork, I like the nice pink flowers on bright BG, but the dark branch is pulling eye to much, what I will say that the first view is going to the branch and only after to the beautiful flowers. I hope that you do understand what I will say 
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Miro
Switzerland-Malaysia
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Comment posted by Gary Yeoh on 12/12/13 at 06:05 am EST
Registered on 09/01/09, 588 Posts, 8184 Comments
Thanks everyone for your comments.
I intend to make this into a greeting card and I left the space on the left for Haiku by Basho:
"The leafless cherry,
Old as a toothless woman,
Blooms in flowers,
Mindful of its youth."
Gigi: I did have a version with your suggestions which I did not post but since you have brought these points up, here it is.
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Comment posted by Ian Wolfenden on 12/12/13 at 06:53 am EST
Registered on 05/18/07, 1108 Posts, 7647 Comments
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Wonderfully creative image, Gary !! I think I do prefer the visual quality of the repost with its greater emphasis on the flowers, though reading the haiku suggests that the pallor of the flowers in the original might be worth sticking by when you set the words in place. So, I'm in two minds - sorry !!!
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Comment posted by Morris McClung on 12/12/13 at 3:29 pm EST
Registered on 05/07/07, 670 Posts, 19650 Comments
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A work of art, Gary. I liked the haiku, too. Excellent comp and use of line.
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Morris McClung
Parker, Colorado
Website
"If it is more than 6 feet from the car, it is not photogenic." Edward Weston to Ansel Adams
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“He who works with his hands is a laborer.
He who works with his hands and his head is a craftsman.
He who works with his hands and his head and his heart is an artist.”
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Comment posted by Sanjay Sundaram on 12/12/13 at 10:44 pm EST
Registered on 04/09/13, 107 Posts, 725 Comments
Very artistic, Gary. I like the sparseness of leaves and abundance of blooms. Wonderful composition too. I second Allen's suggestion to enhance the presence of the flowers, since they are light against a light background. But, it is a beautiful image as it is. Nicely done!
Sanjay
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Sanjay Sundaram
Austin, Texas |
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Comment posted by Bill Fach on 12/14/13 at 2:02 pm EST
Registered on 11/01/03, 1805 Posts, 26981 Comments
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Gary: I do like the repost but my favorite view is the larger image that shows some of the intricate detail in the flowers and the texture of the BG. Well composed, captured and presented.>=))>
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Bill Fach
Soli Deo Gloria
www.sdgimages.com
Houston, Texas
Flora Gallery Moderator |
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Comment posted by Albert Darmo on 12/15/13 at 7:07 pm EST
Registered on 11/25/08, 1386 Posts, 11978 Comments
Hi Gary  With my weak eyesight. i have to echo Bills thoughts, i like the large version with the intricate detail of the flowers
Albert Darmo
Canada
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